So, you don’t love me?
No.
And that kiss?
May be we had a moment, that’s all.
Tears rolling down her eyes blurred her vision and she could barely capture the glance of him walking away, standing numb she wondered the thing she named love, was actually just a bunch of such moments.
No.
And that kiss?
May be we had a moment, that’s all.
Tears rolling down her eyes blurred her vision and she could barely capture the glance of him walking away, standing numb she wondered the thing she named love, was actually just a bunch of such moments.
This Five Sentence Fiction is shared with Five Sentence Fiction - Moments.
OUCH!!
ReplyDeleteFive sentence fiction was brilliant!
Thanks Red :)
DeleteOhhhhh.... Maybe he did not know that it was such moments that made 'Love'.
ReplyDeleteBeautiful work Priyanka! :)
Most of the people don't, unfortunately... Soumya
DeleteIndeed a good one! :)
ReplyDeleteThanks pal :)
DeleteThis is stunning! What a painful revelation to have, too. Excellent writing!
ReplyDeleteThanks Valerie, I am glad you could connect to it :)
DeleteLove what you've written here. In fact your words triggered a song to immediately come to my mind, a song which had been EXTREMELY popular while I'd been a teenager. Would love to know how close does this song come to elicit he emotions you'd wanted to elicit from anyone who reads this
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Wow Robin..I am so glad that you could connect to my writing in such beautiful way... :)
Delete"A bunch of such moments" - God!!! I wish I could implant your creative side of the brain into mine ... Every time I read you, there is always some line that leaves a deep impression ... you are too good a weaver of words .... awesome :-)
ReplyDeleteI am flattered :)
DeleteWow!! You've really captured the emotion in the realisation of love being a 'bunch of such moments'. I love that line too. Brilliantly written in very few words. xx
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Thank you Lizzie :)
DeleteThis is very good. Lots of emotion and insight.
ReplyDeleteThanks a bunch Mr. Smith :)
DeleteAw the poor thing :/ Love is a bunch of moments- will remember that one :)
ReplyDeleteRoisin Peddle..Awww.. thanks dear :)
Delete5 lines with a 5 tons of feelings, Amazing post :)
ReplyDeleteKeep 'em coming :)
Cheers!
(please delete the comment if it has appeared the second time, I am trying for the second time)
Anoop, this one is appeared for the first time only.. I am glad you tried for the second time.
DeleteAnd yes, thanks for liking this post!